Sunday, 21 June 2009
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Finally Finished
I wrote the first two lines of this poem on 7-29-07, then I wrote the next four lines on 2-20-08, and now I've finally written the last two lines today, 6-21-09. I wonder, are the lapses in time evident?
The days seem shorter when you know the end is near,
Everything looks brighter when you know you're in the clear;
I can see the spiraling black tunnel just ahead,
And all the lies my mind was fed
Come back on black wings,
Whispering sinister things.
I can see the light at the end of the tunnel just ahead,
Then I realize the light is a freight train and I'm dead.
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Comments (3)
i really like this one. and no, i don't think you can tell that it was done in segments. i noticed only because you said it first. i like how the black tunnel turns white, a nice image, and alusion.
Not evident, nope. First time I read it, I didn't take in where the breaks were and it flowed well. Good stuff.
@the_giant_I - @DarklyLitWords - Thank you, both of you. I guess it is possible to write something coherent over the span of time.